Thursday 26 October 2017

Hi. I am from Alaska. I live in a small cabin. Me and my family and I where going snowboarding. And staying in a bigger cabin. When we got there as soon as I stepped out of are hot sweaty car. I froze in the cold shivering. Icicles where hanging of are car. But we started making or way up the deep piles of snow. As soon as we got there I saw how much bigger it was then are cabin. Then as soon as the door slammed i knew we where not the only ones in there...
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  1. HillcrestBlog329 October 2017 at 21:18

    Hello Saltycat,
    You have used some descriptive vocabulary e.g. "sweaty", and "deep piles". Try to add even more interesting words. Unfortunately, you have many spelling errors, which distracts from your story. Avoid using unnecessary words in a short piece of writing e.g. The first three sentences do not add to the story. Well done on completing Week #7 of the 100 Word Challenge.
    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Van

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